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Originally written for Danniversary (April 3) 2011.
On fanfiction: [link]
Original Author's Notes:
Note on the rating: Rated T for character death and descriptions of battles, wounds, and a destroyed village. Although I was trying to focus more on the angst than the gore, I added some harsh stuff in flashback. I guess it’s a pretty dark story, but I feel like it ends on a hopeful note, so hopefully it isn’t too completely depressing and tragic.
The basic idea I had was that there was one original Phantom who fought ghosts and did the right thing, but when he died, he passed on the Phantom persona to someone who passed it on when he died, down through time. This is the plotline I came up with to fit that premise (and I did mean for Danne to be our Danny, in case you were confused). I like the way it turned out, but was really hesitant to post because I feel that it’s just a really, really weird story…
So it would be great if you could drop a line or two about what you thought. This is about five times longer than my normal short story word limit and I tried so many different things here for the first time (fight sequence, angst, back flash, original character, non-cannon/AU plotline, character death, etc.) that I poured over this story for a long time trying to get things right, but I really have no clue how any of it turned out for you guys. Please let me know what worked and what didn’t and what I can improve on for next time or if there should even be a next time. : )
Thanks for reading!
On fanfiction: [link]
Original Author's Notes:
Note on the rating: Rated T for character death and descriptions of battles, wounds, and a destroyed village. Although I was trying to focus more on the angst than the gore, I added some harsh stuff in flashback. I guess it’s a pretty dark story, but I feel like it ends on a hopeful note, so hopefully it isn’t too completely depressing and tragic.
The basic idea I had was that there was one original Phantom who fought ghosts and did the right thing, but when he died, he passed on the Phantom persona to someone who passed it on when he died, down through time. This is the plotline I came up with to fit that premise (and I did mean for Danne to be our Danny, in case you were confused). I like the way it turned out, but was really hesitant to post because I feel that it’s just a really, really weird story…
So it would be great if you could drop a line or two about what you thought. This is about five times longer than my normal short story word limit and I tried so many different things here for the first time (fight sequence, angst, back flash, original character, non-cannon/AU plotline, character death, etc.) that I poured over this story for a long time trying to get things right, but I really have no clue how any of it turned out for you guys. Please let me know what worked and what didn’t and what I can improve on for next time or if there should even be a next time. : )
Thanks for reading!
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Aaaaauuuggghhh whywouldyoudothistome? .___.
*writhes a bit this time before dying*
That was terrible. Not in the 'it's a bad story and you shoudl feel bad. BI' way, but in the 'ohgeez what have you done?' sort of way. If you get what I mean. I know it's pretty strange to say, but "That was terrible." is in no way meant to be taken as an insult.
This was... different. A lot different, then what I usually see. Now.... this concept is original. I mean... geez! *can't get my thoughts in any sort of order for you - sorry*
I... did I completely miss this on FFN? I don't know how I did that. .__.
This is... huh. Well, I can agree that it's longer than your usual - I was expecting a short outing, but was surprised with this! XD
Not that it's a bad thing. x3 I really do adore those long fics. ;D I can appreciate fanfiction, any length, but I think something in my heart just loves it when I find myself facing a giant wall of text... XD
Weird story? Yes, it is. It's extremely weird, strange, and so, totally out there. So much different than anything I've seen. Whoa. The concept is really cool, and I'm dying to know where you ever came up with it.
Besides that, I think I may have to drop a review and/or comment later, with any of my more specific thoughts on this, simply because I need time to put my brain back together. It sort of got blown to pieces. BI
Seriously don't know what to say. BI
This has reeaaally got some strange atmosphere. So much different atmosphere. There is so much I want to say right now but just can't... words... I...
I'll get back to you on that. .___.
~Dash
*writhes a bit this time before dying*
That was terrible. Not in the 'it's a bad story and you shoudl feel bad. BI' way, but in the 'ohgeez what have you done?' sort of way. If you get what I mean. I know it's pretty strange to say, but "That was terrible." is in no way meant to be taken as an insult.
This was... different. A lot different, then what I usually see. Now.... this concept is original. I mean... geez! *can't get my thoughts in any sort of order for you - sorry*
I... did I completely miss this on FFN? I don't know how I did that. .__.
This is... huh. Well, I can agree that it's longer than your usual - I was expecting a short outing, but was surprised with this! XD
Not that it's a bad thing. x3 I really do adore those long fics. ;D I can appreciate fanfiction, any length, but I think something in my heart just loves it when I find myself facing a giant wall of text... XD
Weird story? Yes, it is. It's extremely weird, strange, and so, totally out there. So much different than anything I've seen. Whoa. The concept is really cool, and I'm dying to know where you ever came up with it.
Besides that, I think I may have to drop a review and/or comment later, with any of my more specific thoughts on this, simply because I need time to put my brain back together. It sort of got blown to pieces. BI
Seriously don't know what to say. BI
This has reeaaally got some strange atmosphere. So much different atmosphere. There is so much I want to say right now but just can't... words... I...
~Dash